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She had seen him looking at her, his brown eyes tracking her movements as their bodies rattled inside of the train.

Each day he seemed to move closer, becoming more daring. At first she was only flattered, catching his eyes in thanks as they left the train and went off to their separate worlds. Soon, it seemed she knew him.  Knew him in the swaying of his body as he gripping the rail, and in the lifting, flick of his wrist to look at the watch with the brown, leather strap, and how her hair would stand on end as the gaze of his eyes left tiny pin pricks at the back of her neck.

His actions were silent love letters that touched her through the narrow space of the train.

Today, of all days, he chose to stand next to her, his hand sitting at his hip with fingers curled out towards her. It seemed to her that those fingers wanted to be touched.

She felt the pulse of him,

of everything,

in that space between them.

It was warm and frantic, frenzied with the possibilities that came with the scant brush of fingertips.

She extended her pinky, stopping it a fraction from his. The energy pulsed. Her spine tingled.

And yet she saw the impossible space between his fingers and the quiet, unmoving stillness of his body, and did not know how she could possibly fill it.
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Another piece that I have pulled out of the pages of my journals. One of my cracks at a prose poem as well. (When I'm doing my writing exercises, I end to write these passages that walk the edge of poetry and prose, rather than choose one or the other.)

So one could say that this poem is about a love story. About the chances you take when you want to start a relationship, but all the fears and pressures that go along with them.

Thanks for reading! Enjoy! :heart:
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*SurrealCachinnation Feb 12, 2013  Student Writer
I have borrowed the wonderful title of your piece for an AWESOME project by =SilverInkblot that uses titles of existing deviations to form the lines of a Found Poem. The idea is to ay attention to titles, which can make or break a piece, and to give exposure to as many deviants as possible. :heart:

If you'd like to see my poem, you can find it here: [link]
And you can read about the project here: [link]
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=Sammur-amat Aug 30, 2012   General Artist
Ah, this is quite an elegantly executed piece. Congratulations on the DLD for it, lovely:heart:
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~Throntre Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for the watch! :D
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=Sammur-amat Sep 1, 2012   General Artist
My pleasure indeed! :la:
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*xlntwtch Aug 28, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratssignplz:...on the DLD. Terrific flash fiction, emcompassing worlds of 'theme' in a few words. Thank you. :+fav:
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~Throntre Aug 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart: Oh goodness, I still can't believe I got featured!
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.
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Mood: Love ~LynnStrife Oct 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Kinda sad, yet beautiful :) Lovely~
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*KJ-Illustration Oct 1, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Hi :heart: Your work has been featured in my September Feature: [link] :love: :hug:

ps. Please :+favlove: (in the left-hand-corner) the article to spread the love and attention if you enjoyed it (:
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